Aet Lindling

XD Hahaha! This is hilarious! If only it were true... Anyway, everything I noticed was already pointed out in the other reviews, so I have nothing to offer but praise. ...

"All had long swords in their hands and all looked liked they knew how to use them." Instead: "All four had long swords in their hands and (no all) looked ...

Bwaha, that ending is FUNNY. But vote Obama. I believe I am one of the non-pig males. While saying this kind of makes me a pig automatically, I don't care ...

Um, well, I dunno how one can really review a piece like this. I'm glad my piece has achieved cult status such that one would make something based off of ...

Yeah, that was the impression I sort of picked up on... Something like that. I don't think it's always just a given that fragments and same-syntax sentences are bad, it ...

...Whoa. This was a rather pleasant twist on the usual "oh look at me I'm so emo, and now i'll kill myself", and yet I suppose pleasant isn't the right ...

It was pretty good. I like the whole hacking wizards thing, it was new. I think it drew back to a Harry Potter thing every now and then but I ...

NO! If that's all, then it's perfect, apparently. Gah... She has this bad habit too! Btw, glad to see you're correcting it Inky. You AREN'T supposed to capitalize that. TRUST ...

"He felt the wind blow by his face and the grass blow by his feet. He glanced down and saw how fast he was pushing himself. He glanced back and ...

LOVE it. It's the mocking itself cliche story with no point but to be silly I've always wanted to write. It reminds me sort of The Hitchhiker's Guide to the ...

The plot sounds good, although to put it in a nutshell you need far more description, and a lot better grammar. Put in periods at the ends of sentences, CAPITALIZE ...

*sigh* Damn you, Altria. I , fyi, have nothing to do with them in particular, just... damn them. Also, I liked it. Really good! The last line was pretty powerful ...

AWESOME POEM! COOL! :elephant: :elephant: :D :D

Something I noticed, which I don't have time to point out all the errors but they're there. "'What?' Asked Bettina." is incorrect, "'What?' asked Bettina." is the correct form. Since ...

Probably. I can't find much fault, but that's most likely cause I'm preoccupied with writing my own work. Altogether I'd give it a 9/10, 1 point away because I found ...